i like that echo of the first installment. this is quickening the pace.

wow the images are bitter and yet so strangely vivid and real. this is quite unlike anything ive read before.

"a body that had learnt to love all over again, shadowing the bruises

"a body that loved the taste of Apples and snow

and she remembered in a haze of blinding perfection

that there had been no snow in Eden."- trembling and beautiful and fierce. this looks set to be good, and you're right the title is wonderful.

Simply...

wow.

So incredibly incredible... and such a bitter retelling.

Wow.

and she remembered in a haze of blinding perfection

that there had been no snow in Eden.

I liked all the parts but those two lines hit their mark well.

"A name in vain, a name to blame

say it softly or you'll never live it down"

I loved those two lines, for some reason. Great piece, it really made me think.

Creepy, but still enchanting.

astounding...I love how it was written, and the last line gives it so much more. great job!

c'est tres bon

I found the last line in particular, highly amusing. I just love the feel to this. the dramatic flare and just your word use, which is divine. very keenly spoken and woven in a gorgeous fashion. love it.

~* noelle

Chilling... I don't normally comment on things involving religious imagery, but this is just wonderful. I can just picture everything you wrote about here. Though "learnt" should be "learned." Good work nonetheless.

I like!