Dreamy... Vivid and clear. This is such a gem!

I loved every bit, especialy the last part. Great work!

It's strange. I got a sort of bored tone coming from somewhere. It almmost felt like the girl. Anyway, I love the line about the "unwordly girl". Very unexpected.

A bit hard to follow, yet the overall feel remains one of a mildly macabre fairy tale. Grammar and mechanics are steady and stable; it remains a strong piece from beginning to end.

second to last line my heart just stopped; it's that kind of love. just so pretty and beautiful. oh, and don't forget sparkly. :) love.it.

~* noelle

oh hoe.the last line is the stinger, used before but ever so perfect.oh the purity, those blood red marks.

never thought of halos that way before.

Maybe you could add more... Something about wings. I personally like it how it is. There's some punctuation ("it's" in the 11th paragraph, 2nd line should be "its") and format (the "Perfectly center. Perfectly aligned. Perfectly--perfect." could be centered to emphasize the point.) I have to say that I especially like the quote, "No one likes such an unwordly girl."