Good story so far... it's emotional...

O -shivers- i love it. don't stop.

such gorgeous imagery. i love the raw power of your writing. carefully unstudied.

m-azing.i love what you have so far.i'd love to read more.

Vicious. I like it.

I like it. It's different from a lot of what you've written.

I think I shall be watching this story...because, well, it's based on a JoJ song. So keep writing.

It's very good, although a little too washed in nostalgia for me; I prefer stories set in the present, happening as you read them. However, the storyline is fantastic, and as always, your writing is icily beautiful. Good job.

Very captivating imagery, I've always been fond of Sadism and Masochism based stories, never seem to find many around here, especially involving female relationships. Personally I like to hear from the masochist's side of the relationship. For me it's a much deeper read to know why one chooses to relinquish personal freedoms for their glorification of pain as I like to say. Anyway great work so far.

*mouth hangs open* Violence mixed with a bit of sociopathic nostalgia...I love it!

This was excellent. I loved your choice of words, the imagery, and the fact you KNOW what you're talking about. Normally I stick to the male/male but if this continues on being successful, I'll be sure to be back. Great start!

HarlequinPlease fix me...