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| MariMari89 2005-11-04 ch 1,   | Hmm. Well, the tales are definitely cute. The first one...seems as if you don't truly explain the characters. They seem one-dimensional, almost. But, it's a very cute fairytale, and I like it a lot for that quality. It seems like it would be lovely as a children's picture book. The second one is also the same idea, only applied to history. It has less of an appeal to the fairy-tale-loving audience, but, is a cute story nonetheless. However, the third short story is what intrigued me the most. Slash is very interesting to me, because few authors can do it realistically. This story is very fluffy and adorable, yet, lacks the extra substance the reader may desire. It would be very interesting to see what would happen if you expanded or continued it. Overall, for short stories, these are good, and generally have a fairytale feeling about them. Nice job. |