I like this one. Surreal and beautiful.

woah. the message and ur point is clear, and the rythm is perfect. it has a relli nice flow. now let me find sum otha phrases to stutter and repeat. >.< meep! the symbolism and oh... u sound so, so knowledgable and mature! i feel insignificant. meep! >.< hav u ever published anything u write? coz u shud. and strike others dumb with ur awe-inspiring poetry... u can prolli tell that im bored, and on a suga high, rite? meep! >.

M, how true. Disappointment is a fact of life. I'm trying, as hard as I can, to become one of those people who spray-paint their blackened crown silver, and pretend to be king for a day.