Wow, this was an amazing story. You have a talent for painting a picture with words :) Good job!

~carm~

This is really good it did actually make me cry a little bit still it opens ur eyes to see how such little things can effect a person - good job!

Laura sounds like someone I know...I just let her lie to, it's much more fun that way...to see the extent that some people will lie to be noticed...eh anyway, this was a short little thing but good none-the-less. :)

Ooh I had to check this one out before I went to bed...looks good so far, looks v. interesting! I think I'll read some more tomorrow. Why have I never read your stuff before? I'm confused and angry with myself...I should sleep...

TTFN!

omg lol i thought my life was bad...il dread again soon...and sorry...if u hate sympathy slap me :D

wows...loving the story if this is ur life...sounds just liek mine. except my life is mising the sexy punk guy...the friends and feelign are there tho. il read the rest soon...Rachel xx

Holy crap that scared me. I'm sorry, I'm crying right now, not only because it was such a sad story, but because right now, Chole's life is the life i lead. i scares me so bad. i keep everything inside and only let in out in my writting. it seems none of my friends at school are friends and anyone will backstab me the first chance they get. I refuse to get attached to anyone, so i wont have a problem like Chloe did with Damien. Holy crap, this scares the Hell out of me. So real, so scary. well, i suppose that's the highest complement you can get... i would be for me anyways...

Hey Chloe, it's Hope. I just want you to know I'm just finishing chapter 10. I can't put it down! It hurts though to re-live the past. And I'm sorry if I hurt you. Please forgive me I never meant to... I was only trying to get Laura to stop abusing all of us... it backfired... right now I'm just going to try to kept the peace... for now. I love you Chloe I just want you to know that we are pretty close and I love like a best friend and you are the only one I can trust right now. I'll explain when I start hopeless...

Oh and it's great it's one of the best you've written. I love it. Who knew reality could be this painful. I LOVE IT! I can't wait to read the next chapter which I'll do in a couple of mintues! Love ya. Peace out, party hard, rock on

At first I was really worried that this was going to be one of these stories where the protagonist has all of these problems but then she meets the perfect guy and everything is right. I really like how it shows how petty highschoolers can get. I also like how in the poem Chloe points out that she talked behind their backs too. She realized that she isn't perfect, which alot of the times people fale to mention when they are pointing fingers at other people. The only problem i have with this story is that it starts off kind of oddly. You seemed to get more into the flow of the story later on but it started kind of halty. Otherwise I liked it.

It really is a beautiful story. Really sad, but beautiful and a good lesson in it. Hope you keep writing like this, 'cause love reading your story.Thanks for publishing it.*~*kay

Hey this is good!

Loved it

hey this is good!

So far it is pretty interesting, and each chapter being an introduction of a friend to your narrator is pretty cool.

The only suggestions I would have to make would be you said in the 2nd paragraph, "If it isnt..." but if you use that then you have to state one thing she would make up, and then say "then it is..." and state the second thing. Also, in the third paragraph, you'd probably want to say "She had medium brown hair that curls out at her shoulders." and avoid using sentence fragments.

Laura sounds like a real person, and unfortunately like one of my friends. Maybe more than one. Her character developement is very good.

jups, I really like it. Not being able to update like you wish sucks, I know, but every chappie that you do update is one more! (Seeing it from the bright side) So keep up the good work, can't wait to read more.*~*kay