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| Wishdreamer89 2005-11-06 ch 1,  | abuseI loved the concept of the poem, but you should work on making it sound less forced and let the words naturally blend and flow because it feels to choppy and unsmooth for such a poem with a potential to have a real powerful message. Work on this on, hope to hear from you, ~Colette/Wishdreamer89 |