I don't like this one...not to say it's bad I just don't like it as much as some of your others.

This one I get...I think.

"his fingers tap the tones on the-grinding wheel", is marvelous. I would like to see the form that you intended this to be in, as formatting adds alot to a presentation, and I know FP limits that, but this stands alone well here, it speaks and scratches at the individual in the greater whole. Throughout this entire collection the voice of the works stands out and captures the readers attention, empathy, relatability, and it speaks many truths that are profound. I quite enjoyed this. Very poignant, as it gently coaxes the reader to examine more closely specific situations, emotions, and social relevances. Great write.

This is truly relatable. The voice carries a social, and personal tone that the reader can identify with. Good work.

"Four by three and still calculating", is wonderful phrasework. Well done.

Not sure that I grasp this fully, but it is thought provoking.

Very visual scene created, and the informed voice gives credence to the final question. Good work.

The tone in this brings the reader in. So much philosophical and sheer wonderment. The wanting to know, wanting to see, wanting to feel comes across concretely. Very well written.

So much sound and rush to this. Reminds me of Pablo Neruda somehow, very overflowing visual lines that contribute to the sound. Excellent work.

Marvelous voice and form. I like how it slopes down the page, and the format definately enhances the visual, and adds a vessal for the imagery of the words. "a child, still as the lonesome-...queen bee,", is a particularly capturing image and connection. Well done.

The diction is excellent, just take out the "whatever" at the beginning - the first three lines are lovely on their own.

Enjoyed the "replicating tones"

Fervent tone.

Splendid and succinct.

Indeed the cause of purpose.