I really enjoyed this story.
I loved your pull between the three characters, I really liked how I didn't know who Zeke was going to choose.
Your characters are vivid, and you really made me like each and everyone of them.

I can't wait to read more stuff from you.
Sayden.

Well, this story had a good start at least.

Sorry, but this is just how I truly felt about this story.

The writing is good, easy to follow and read. It's just too bad that not a whole lot was explained, as far as the other race and where they came from, and well, just plot development in general. I know you probably intended for it to be that way, but it ended so abruptly. With pretty much no resolution, in my opinion. It makes me suspect that you just tired of the story and decided to end it as soon as possible, in the easiest way as possible (killing off everyone in the story).

It should defiantly be expanded, because the ending doesn't make the beginning a worth while read. I REALLY hate saying this, because the writing was good, and I really value good writing.

Also, seriously, this is not Romance or Adventure. I agree with some of the other reviewers, it's defiantly Angst. I didn't see any real romance and not a lot of adventure either.

Anyway, I was just really disappointed because I still held some hope that Ciathan would get over himself or even better Zeke and the others would leave.. Gah, I just hate that I spent time reading this I guess. I might look at your other stories, because you are a good writer (i'm trying to stress this because I'm just being pissy about the ending lol) and it's very possible that this story was just a bad apple or whatever. Then again, other people might love this... major character death just isn't my cup-o-tea (and if you would have put a warning up I wouldn't have read this at all because it really puts me off.)

This was really depressing.

oh my gah the ending sucked ballz! your writting more write? theres a sequel? gah if theres not i might scream...or throw a chair...ugh now i'm all annoyed.

Ah, you gotta love it when people dont listen to warnings of other people. Wasnt he warned not to love this being? Honestly.

huh?

Should have had Angst as one of the genres. Great story.

I feel so depressed.
Why did you have to make this story so well-written?
Why?
I loved these guys. Now they're all dead.
Maybe I should give you the many compliments you deserve...
I'll try, but I'm so depressed. Wow. The chapter when we got to see Ciathan's perspective, I could not function for about five minutes in my excitement. Not to mention, Ayella and Keya were such an adorable couple.
Now they're dead. So, so, so sad...
I'm definitely reading your other stories.

O.O
wow. so ... sudden. so sad. :O
shouldn't this be put in the angst category as well? seems to me more angst than adventure ... -_-

*chases the author with rocks* good story terrible terrible ending and sadly i feel like i just wasted 1 hour and 30 min. of my life =(

Dalmatians!

Bleh. I'm sympathetic as to your need to end the story, but this was a painful ending. It should've wrenched my heart - made me feel at least the level of emotion the first chapter managed, instead it left me feeling like I'd wasted my time. But I have a feeling you know this, and, having moved on to other stories, don't care. Which is fine, I just needed to rant.

Outside of that, however, the plot-twist was particularly well done, the characters started in a manner that indicated good character development, even if none of those characters' potential was even remotely tapped, and the writing was decent. A good piece, and one that had grand potential had you not become so disenchanted with it. Not your fault, though. Sometimes these things just die midway through.

The ending was SO unsatisfactory. I'm sorry, I'm really disappointed. The fight battle was alright, but...the ending. Blah. I felt like the story was cut short. It had alot of potential to be a long one, but oh wells. It was still a good story, I just didn't like the ending. :x

Oh my gosh I hate you! I love you because this is SUCH a good story, and despite all the typos and grammatical errors, it was so well written. But it was so SAD! *cries*
NU
(I realize I'm being a bit of a hypocrite, as it's the sort of thing I would write as well, but I don't care! D: )

Well written peice. I lliked the amount of detail you showed and the fact you changed how Ciathan had a peaceful personality on the outside, but inside he was critical of the people around him. Thanks.

After all the pain you put Caithan and Zeke you couldn't allow them to have a happy ending? T_T Perhaps when you don't hate the story anymore you could...rewrite it? It really is a beautiful story but I'd think they'd both atleast deserve a happy ending, even thought Caithan killed everyone >_>;;