this is ok but a little confusing. not ur best but still pretty good. great job,

mez

I love the contrast you used in this one. Too bad there are only a few people out there that really see how much life sucks in the long run...v_v

Really nice, i particularly liked the lines "And the steps that are taken/ By the mass of wandering souls/ Are lined with stones and broken glass". They just jump out at me.