Wow, this is truly beautiful! I love the repition of "One" because it makes the piece all the more a song-type structure. Do you have chords to it? I know you like to experiment on the guitar so let me know. I love the guitar! haha.
xRachx

Absolutely beautiful, and so true. I wish I could believe this better and seek his face more often. Awesome poem.

I love this. The rhyme scheme was very dynamic and interesting, which I enjoyed greatly. The end, I think was my favorite part, particularly this line, "One seond to break away." Just something about that line was very powerful to me.

I'm sorry this review is so late coming, life is hectic for me right now.

Masterful work on this!

~*~AbunaiChikara

WOW! Beautiful. It flowed so nicely and it is really powerful. Awesome piece of work.

wow. GREAT JOB. Inspiring.

truly inspirational~ it's good to have faith~

keep writing!