i have to say that this is one of my favorite fanfics that i have ever read because it conveys real emotion from it.

*nods* i like it. it doesnt really seem like a poem, but i really like it a lot. good message.

As poetry, I don't like it. It doesn't have the flow and rhythm of poetry; it explains too much. As a poem, I think it would be better if you made it rhyme slightly, though not too much (think Emily Dickinson).

However, I like it the way it is; I just don't think you should do the line skipping thing or upload it as a poem. It sounds more like a diary entry. Like you're arguing with yourself or something.

I saved my comment(s) about the actual content of the piece for last, because it's a bit long... I've given this issue a lot of thought as well. I love, LOVE the frankness and honesty. I would never be able to post a piece of my thoughts this way, especially about a topic like this... I can relate to every single line here; you have a very clear and articulate style. The entire piece is a question, an uncertainty but the funny thing is you get to know yourself better after a piece like this

This is excellent. It would be great for slam poetry, too.

But the meaning behind it is great.

Wow, great poem!

Almost like prose in places.

Really interesting ideas, I like the way your thoughts slowly developed through the poem.

Really made me think! Keep writing!

so true... keep writing

wow... sometimes i feel exactly like that... i can't help it though. i just can't help not being myself because when i first got here, i tried to be someone else, and now, i can't seem to find the real me... anyways, great capture of feelings and the like. i really liked this!

~mythical luver~

I like this, it doesn't really flow too well, (or maybe it does, I wasn't exactly paying attention to the flow) but it just works. Like a stream of consiousness, repetitive, but not so repititve that it kills the origional point.Very nice.

Wow! Great poem. So many great points here. So many remarkable lines. The ones that really stood out to me were: "patch-worked into a joke of a soul","So maybe my true self is the onethat no one can accept, the onethat I subconsciously keep from myselffor fear I’ll destroy it or, worselet it out","being an originalin a world of carbon copies". I would put more, but you might as well reread your poem. Very inspired, deep poem.

excellent. great description through a poetry format. excellent, excellent, excellent.

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