I like it, its very fantasy like, thats cool. I liked the whole "let it be written" thing, it sounded like you were reading it off a scroll or something. Uh i dont no what else to say, i dont want to say it was good cause then it makes it sounds bad. Anyways nice job, keep writting.

Very nice, I love the fantasy. Though I think I might have seen a grammar mistake or two. Other than that, it was great.

if only... lol

well written, keep it up