I truly liked the imagery held in 'melt down my skin'. It was beautiful, and it really held my attention, when it was beginning to dwindle a bit. This was a nice poem series but I have to say, to an extent, it was lackluster and I wish it had been filled with more 'melt down my skin' kind of descriptions.

- Clap Trap, from Review Marathon [link in my profile]

I really loved it! This is an interesting style, and I truly liked that as I read it, I was keeping pace with the protagonist, breathless and kind of rushed! It was good, that way.

However, there are a few spelling errors that I'm sure were just uploading problems. They are:

Ican't

should be 'I can't'

whatI

should 'what I'

Otherwise, an intriguing start!

I love this series of poems. They are all well written and I like how you seperated them since, although the belong together, are each a different poem on their own. I like the theme and how a lot of people, sadly, can relate to this... Great job!

I like the idea of melting down your skin. I don't know what I think of the repeating of "skin," especially when the second one is at the end of a line, just like the first is. Also, I think if you are going to use "and in the end" twice, the second should start a new stanza, otherwise it just seems like you're repeating stuff. If that made any sense at all. Keep writing! :)

Wow. I really like this one. It's all about rhythm and rhyme and feeling. Great work. The images are amazing. Keep writing! :)

The first two lines are fantastic imagery. I also like the rhyme in this. Simple, short, but still powerful. Keep writing! :)

but in the end

glue-gun skin

is only make-believe

just like you

and your midnight eyes

gorgeous. a tugging sadness & desperation that flows beautifully. excellent set of poems that tell a clear story. xx

Wow, that's a pretty tough thing to go through. There's always that doubt in your stomach...Nice poem. Keep writing! :)

i love how she's saying she wont say the words ...as she's saying them. well written. going into faves

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eek I love this! the rhythm is excellent, and the sentiment is so subtle and simple and elegant! AWESOME work!

i love how she goes through so many stages as she slowly evolves and accepts the fact that he isn't coming back.

good job.

so true.. great ending

nice repition.. beautiful poem

I love that ending.. awesome job.. this collection is relaly good

i like this... a great take on the same old rhyme thing... awesome job