so i spent like two hours reading this
and at first, i didn't think i'd like it
but then i just couldn't stop reading
i got a tad addicted
and now my homework sits in the background, unfinished
and though i'm a bit late to read this
i still loved it :)
i like the characters
and i like how it kind of reflects Pride & Prejudice, but it's not very obvious
i definitely loved this story, good work =)

izzie

I'm blown away by your writing. I read this years ago, when it was first published. I remembered your pen name and came back to re-read it,and it's better than I'd remembered. Back then I was eager to race to the end, to find out what had happened. But now I'm enjoying the actual writing more, and each sentence is seriously so enjoyable to read; your writing is so graceful and eloquent without being wordy.

I wish I could read your "serious" stuff too.

violet.

Love that story, it really is like Pride and Prejudice (which I love). Maxim turns from being an ** to a romantic which is sweet.

Well, that was pretty freakin' awesome.

I was going to use a more colloquial expletive, but I actually I have no idea if FP censors reviews.

It's 2AM, so I better go and come back to offer something more coherent.

But I'd just like to say that for your relaxation writing, it's pretty damn good. I especially like Gracie's observations and philosophies on life, probably because, well, sometimes that's what people (ie. like me) do.

On that egotistical note, I will once again say that I really like your style of writing. An because this is the internets, I'm going to have to end it with a simple (but genuine), smile.

:)

Beautiful story! I couldn't stop reading this. I almost canceled plans to go to the movies in order to finish this!

You're such a great writer! I'm sure that you are publishable. Don't stop writing!

Yup. Still amazing.

Once word: Amazing.

Sorry my mistake, I think you only typed "Janey" once and the rest of the times you had "Janie". The one "Janey" is in chapter 5 after she gets the vanilla extract and exits.

Sorry tehee

I noticed a little name mix up here in chapter 6,
I think you mixed up Grace and Janie's names in the beginning>

i cant believe they got together.

I loved it! It was refreshing to read something about a girl that isn't the typical "quiet girl who is actually very confident and gorgeous, only she doesn't dress to show it".
It's hard to admit, but I kinda felt connected to Grace in a way, I have a lot of things in common with her, but I try to hide it now. I just put a smile on my face and pretend everything is great. I think I'm becoming a little fake, and I hate it. But I think I can't go back now, I've tried, but the smile is like glued to my face. I think reading your story made me realize that I can't go on like that, so I'll just have to try harder.
Awesome story, thank you. And sorry for using this space to write about myself, but I thought that you should know you may have made a difference in someone's life by writing something just to relax :).

Your writing is profound and it makes me jealous. But I just feel like your story is all over the place. Sometimes it feels like I'm reading an essay of her thoughts. It seems kind of incoherent, like disjoint beautiful things that need to just be taken a step further and strung together so it's not too excessive of one thing and not of the other. I think some things are described a lot and other things are completely skipped over. I was a bit confused in the sense of time because it just felt like it was jumping around. Some of the rants of hers seemed irrelevant and unnecessary.

I hope you're not mad at me for saying all these things, because I really really do admire your writing. I'm just suggesting a few things that might help to make that writing even more effective and placed. Obviously, you don't have to listen to a word I say (:

It's weird because I don't love Max or anything - I wanted to cry whenever he was saying all those mean things to her. But I guess that IS your typical immature boy story where he doesn't know how to treat her so he just says all these mean things. You could see how he was interested in her though, even from the very beginning, like how he asked for her name, but never would have if it didn't matter. I think because she was so rude to him he just got on the defensive and didn't know how to get off of it.

I could definitely relate to Grace's past - not in the sense that I was so desperate that I hoped into bed with a taken, pimply guy, but just in the sense that you become so enamored with the idea of love rather than love itself that you just make some of the dumbest mistakes while trying to convince yourself that you've found that kind of magic. It made a lot of sense to me and it was nice to be able to relate. I think 7 out of every 10 people have once felt that way.

Anyways, yeah. Good job. I wish I could write in the style that you do (:

-- Alyssa

holy hell this is amazing yep that preatty much sums it all up

Big boo-boo:

But one question stands. I didn’t love Jessica. He claims to have loved me.

Yes, I don't think she loved her, and she is not a he.

Other than that, I'm having a good time reading the story so far. :D I read Selfish People last night, and I thought it was pretty good.

Great story. Maybe the plot's a bit silly, but it's written in a very realistic (and pessimistic, maybe) way that it's just a very good read. There's nothing wrong in writing about a "chubby" girl with insecurities. You write well, too. :)

I loved it. So there. You can moan about how silly and not-serious this story was, but I think it still was great. :)