yeah this seems better than the other one, I love it! but did you replace Andy or just his name or something, that confused me...Anyway UPDATE SOON!

Very cool, this is! I can't wait to read more! I think I'm going to like this version better. It sounds like it is going to be more realistic and cool cool cool awesomeness. :) :) :)

Yay for new and improved versions! This sounds a lot better, there is more detail and it doesn't seemed as rushed as it was before. Nice job! Update soon!

Lady R