Wow! This was beautifully written. And well done with your rhyming! It didn't seem forced, or cheesy, (like mine always do..haha) but it had a nice flow, made it an easy read. I really liked it.

I also liked the continous beach/island/ocean kind of theme you carried through in your poem. It gave it a good "platform" I guess is the right word. But I really enjoyed it! Such a sweet poem!

"My mind is blank as sand upon a midnight, moonlight beach."

Loved that line..great comparison, and it painted a pretty picture in my head..I could really go to the beach right now, that sounds wonderful!

Also..Your last two lines were great! It ended it well...didn't leave it seeming unfinished, but really..the perfect ending! Awesome job! *keep writing*

And o my bob! Pop rocks are the best things ever!! *claps* Great job once again!

~britney

and thanks too for the review! *hugs*

Wonderful. Simply beautiful. Great, GREAT job.

The thing that strikes me most about this poem is the rhythmn present. The iamb present in this poem really makes this piece forceful, yet soothing and pleasant to read. This helps me appreciate the elaborate and descriptive imagery present in this poem.This is truly an excellent piece of work.

Wow!! This poem is great!!It kinda reminds me of some of the poems I have written in the past which is interesting!...The uses of feelings and emotions is really powerful in this!This is a definite 4.5 thumbs up out of 5!

I love the imagery in this, the sensualness and the string of lines really added to the romantic effect. Beautiful, simply beautiful.

~~Trinity