Very thought-provoking poem. Your imagery is very nice, but some of the phrases seem a little awkward. For example, "heavenly cotton ball," while it's just symbolic, comes off as nonsense. If not for the imagery you have, I'd be tempted to say this poem is a pointless collection of phrases. Yes, I do believe you're trying to make a point here, but poetry isn't always supposed to be shrouded in veil after veil of mystery.

As for "A Candid Response": If you aren't going to leave a constructive review, kindly stop reviewing my work. Thank you.

I can't fully comprehend it. But I like it nonetheless. Exellent work.

The second half was definately the better, even if it was choppier. Somehow that style seems to work for you. I'd be envious, but I'm a tad bit too busy enjoying your work.

-simpleton

You rhyme well. Pretty words, can't really find the meaning. But very pretty words. And Jesus, man, if you want to leave a review, then leave one telling what you did/n't like about it. Not these one sentence sarcastic swipes. I think I'll write more lower case prose, just to perturb.

I liked the abstract boldness of this; the quickness that I could read it, each verse kind pf punched the next one into place. Well done.

Juliet.