Nice story - I love the character Holden Caulfield too. He's an incredible creation.

Lovely style, great pace. It felt as though there was a little bit missing between when he was about to leave and when she told him, but I can't work out what it was. maybe description or something. I'm not sure.

Lovely ending.

There were a couple of phrases where the choice of words seemed a bit strange - i.e.

"He cradled her face in his hands, leaned in, and kissed her in a way she was never kissed before"

sounds a little smoother if it is: "He cradled her face in his hands, leaned in, and kissed her in a way she had never been kissed before."

Beautiful sentence by the way ;-D

Lovely piece of writing, beautiful idea. Keep writing!

Wow. That was beautiful.

~dancingintheshadows