lovely. the breaking of "attraction" is well-done.

i've read this before but it just struck me now to review it. i really like this a lot - the way you're so vague leaves a lot to the imagination with strategically placed words. lovelovelove "come one come all" from there out. in the "tongue chewing" stanza, though, i think the word "shoes" could be replaced with something a bit more descriptive: stilettoes, perhaps? horror indeed.

chillingly beautiful...

i love the first little blurb. it reminds me so much of this girl i know...love it :)

Toes crossing within shoes..gave me the shivers.

std attraction? wonderful.

I love this. Sure, it deviates from the norm quite a bit, style and theme wise, but I still feel like I understand it, like I know it. It grabs you somehow, with this dirty underlying tone and it simply commands attention. You have a lovely knowledge of words and your vocabulary and use of it is always excellent.

-jess

liking the style and vocabulary. I don't get that last phrase "&theirmechanism is."

I love this. Flashy machinery. Favourite lines - from (seize the day)on.

Another wonderful piece of work from you. :)

i love the "come one come all" carnival feel to this. a very interesting poem...

amazing work!

I love you.

seriously, this rocked my ... err-it was beyond amazing. ( . .phrase.) the whole thing is powerful, shiver inducing and Halloweenesque throughout its entirity. love, love, LOVE everything in this poem. really, can't descide. you leave me feeling dumb.

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did I mention I love you?

* noelle

Powerful piece! I took away from it that its about the ways that we personally destroy ourselves: We fuck until we're diseased. We drink intil our insides give out. Again powerful piece.

Juliet.