FictionPress.com - let the words flow
| FictionPress.com - let the words flow |
|
| Home Just In Communities Forums Beta Readers Dictionary Search | Login Register Extras |
| TylerB 2007-11-02 ch 1,  | abuseThis is terrific. It seems to bleed emotion, more so than alot of your other works that I've read so far. I'd quote my favorite line but they all seem equally brilliant. |
| Living.My.Life.My.Way 2007-03-03 ch 1, | abuseits really good... |
| LordK 2005-11-10 ch 1, | abuseThis is really, really good. I love the internal rhyming. Your formatting really added to it as well. I really like it a lot. At first the rhythm of the second line seemed a little awkward to me- the clipped rhyme scheme felt as though it should be rapped rather than spoken. But then when you repeated it in the second stanza it felt much smoother, so perhaps that's a personal thing. The ending is great. *claps*~LK |
| Ajna 2005-11-10 ch 1, | abuseBeautiful wording. I absolutely loved this, very well done. |