It was good...a little short maybe but it was really sweet at the end. By the way...are you going to update your other story anytime soon? It's been so long since you have! Anyways...so I like your longer stories a lot more but this is still a nice piece.

*bubbles*

oh ya and update!!

thats so sweet! it was really well written and flowed well for so much information being put into a short piece!

It was not bad. Maybe a little short, but it has potential. Have you ever thought about going back and filling in some of the details?

Comments...hm...maybe you could make it into a story?...Now that reminds me...you haven't updated your other in a LONG while *glares*...Well, this story isn't that bad...but...I don't think this style fits you...also, you kinda keep switching form present to past tense to present again...