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| Peachez 24 2008-07-22 ch 8,  | abusecruel, cruel chapter!! But good. I don't exactly like the whole a*hole brother trying to steal his "would be" girl, but there has to be drama somewhere I guess. Though you're always so mean to your characters! lol anyway, great chappie, can't wait for the next. Keep writing! Peachez |
| Twilight Starr 2008-07-21 ch 8, | abuseShe was an amusing drunk in the beginning. Too bad he didn't vocally answer her question. Nice work. Keep writing. ~Twilight Starr~ |
| cheese 2008-07-17 ch 8, anon. | abusekeep writing!! its really good! |
| Peachez 24 2008-07-15 ch 8, anon. | abuseCRUELTY!! Cruelty I say! lol, great chappie gurl. Though mean in many ways. *winks* couple typos too near the beginning but we forgive you. Can't wait for the next one. Keep writing! Peachez |
| hells666angel 2008-07-15 ch 8, | abuseaww bless um! he can trust her!! lol good chapter x |
| Peachez 24 2008-07-04 ch 7, | abuseAh Megan! That's just mean. Ok, so it's not like it's something I've never done... or will do again, but still. Great story so far. And yes I have to agree with the others. Will... MEOW! lol. Well, keep writing!! Peachez |
| AboveTheFallen 2008-07-01 ch 7, | abusekeep writing its a good story^^ |
| MidnightFall 2008-06-30 ch 7, | abuseI'm loving the story so far. Hope you update soon. I can't wait to read more. |
| Twilight Starr 2008-06-30 ch 7, | abuseUh oh. I'm thinking Gregori is very dangerous. I'd love to see an update. :D Keep writing! ~Twilight Starr~ |
| Twilight Starr 2008-06-30 ch 6, | abuseI liked how she wanted to be there for him. The description of the rash was good. Nice work. ~Twilight Starr~ |
| Twilight Starr 2008-06-30 ch 5, | abuseI can understand his jealousy towards his father. He does sound good looking. ;) Nice work. ~Twilight Starr~ |
| Twilight Starr 2008-06-30 ch 4, | abuseI'm surprised he let Eagan give him a black eye. I'm wondering if the Eagan fight will cause them trouble later on. Nice work. ~Twilight Starr~ |
| Twilight Starr 2008-06-30 ch 3, | abuseHis mom is so nice. Great job! ~Twilight Starr~ |
| Twilight Starr 2008-06-30 ch 2, | abuseMaddie is a bit of a naughty girl, which makes the story interesting and sets her apart from most characters. Nice work. ~Twilight Starr~ |
| Twilight Starr 2008-06-30 ch 1, | abuseGreat beginning. Nice work with the ending line. I like the title and William's protectiveness of Maddie and her family. Good job! Good luck with writing, this story, and life. Have a lovely day and a wonderful summer. ~Twilight Starr~ |