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Reviews For: Alone

Elphie Thropp 2006-01-11 ch 1,	Simple and sweet! Sometimes this approach doesn't work at all (like in "The Old Man and the Sea"-I did NOT like that book), but for you it does. It's also very ironic that my 5th grade year (10-11 years of age) was just like this.Amazing as usual! Keep it up!
liz anya 2005-12-05 ch 1,	Not bad for an 11 year old. :) I can relate.
Emmytastic gal 2005-11-27 ch 1,	HIYA dearie! hows it going? i'm terribly sorry its been so long. :( writers block SUCKS. on to your beautiful poetry... isnt it amazing to see how we've developed? this is amazing work for an 11 year old, but then again you are an amazing writer. yes, simplicity is so effective and eloquent. I can totally relate to the message, having felt like that a lot when i was around that age too... anyways this a completely SPLENDID poem I absolutely LOVE it. awesome work yet again. keep it up :) you rock, Em xox
mepoindexter 2005-11-16 ch 1,	I understand where you're comming from on this. I know myself, that I can't change everyone or every situation that happens, but what I do have ultimate control over is my response to the situation, and no one can ever take that away from me. I could respond to something like that angrly, and my brain would unlock a response accordingly. I could react to that disappointingly, and I would see a result of dissapointment. I could also just say to myself, "I don't think that was very nice of them, I myself would never do that to someone. But I understand everyone isn't the same as me, and I respect that." It helps if you internalize this last one in a really "stuck up" inner voice.
writejoy 2005-11-14 ch 1,	nice poem, especially for an 11 year old kid...but a bit depressing when you think about primary school kids meaning to have a joyous, carefree life, don't you think?Anyway, i like it and the depth of it too nods
Princess-anna57 2005-11-11 ch 1,	Heya! How are you? Thanks for your continual flow of reviews; they mean a lot! ^_^ This poem: the ending was disappointment (to me), but for an 11 year old, this is great. It might be possible for you to expand on it a bit too because the ideas here are really good, and some for reason, I kept asking for morwe, but I do know that this is an older piece and that maybe you'd just like to leave it the way it is seeing that you wrote it when you were 11 years old. The idea of being 'alone' is extremely cliche by now, but you've made it your own, not sounding like everyone else. You mentioned ages ago in one of your reviews that you live in New South Wales (I think, lol). Where abouts? In Sydney? Keep writing and keep being awesome! ^_^ ~Anna~
Beautifula 2005-11-11 ch 1,	Describes the situation. I guess msot of us face it possibly every day whether or not we notice it.
JC. Doodlz 2005-11-11 ch 1,	It's really great for someone so young (at the time). ^-^ It's short, simple but also somehow has a little depth to it. shrugs That's the child-like touch I guess. smiles ~DZ

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