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| teh tarik 2006-12-12 ch 1,  | abusethere's something really divine in this earthly mortal beauty of yours. i especially love the last two lines. they were just plain brilliant. |
| With Rhyme and Reason 2005-12-19 ch 1, | abuseI really like your references to myth. I'm not familiar with the tanka, so I won't criticize your form. This poem strangely reminded me of Poe's "To Helen"--a lovely piece as well. Good job. |
| AboveTheSalt 2005-12-11 ch 1, | abusei can't say i really understand your word choice here because, frankly, i'm not sure if i do. mythology reference(s) no doubt; not sure why it's "Dorian Gray" though. ah well. i wish i understood it better - maybe i'll look some of it up later. if it gets across what you needed to say, that's what's important. -salt. |
| poetic abortion 2005-11-15 ch 1, | abuseoh god. you touched my Psyche (though not as great as my Persephone)obsession. obviously, I love that line and just ADORE the whole thing in all its breathtaking glory. lovely, lovely. lovely. :) ~* noelle |
| simpleplan13 2005-11-15 ch 1, | abusenice |
| the collision of your kiss 2005-11-11 ch 1, anon. | abuseAs I told you, I think this is wonderful. And I can relate really well. The "my Psyche and Muse" line really strikes a chord. Beautiful work, and thank you so much for mentioning me! I feel so honored. ^.^ |
| youzi 2005-11-11 ch 1, | abusegood attempt at writing in a traditional format. "Dorian Gray" brings in dark implications though..was that the intention? do keep writing :D |
| Treblew 2005-11-11 ch 1, | abuseAwesome stuff. I wouldn't know much of these stuff but it is brilliant.It is. Cheers-RW |
| Faithless Juliet 2005-11-11 ch 1, | abuseHonesty; I love the Psyche line the best (I'm somewhat obsessed over her through mythology) I like the last line about syllabul's as well, love is a beautiful (psyche and the muse line) and caotic (the "what?" facter of that last line) it doesn't really fit but it works. I don't know if you were trying to do that but it worked for me. |