Woah.

The whole story was amazing, and the ending was totally...I mean...wow.

It ended so sad! :'( I honestly started crying.

Wow. This was soo amazingly written. Breath-taking, really.
The ending was unexpected at first but when we begin to understand Alex's twisted character, it makes sense.
I liked it better when I didn't know the names, it gave a mysterious vibe... that's exactly what the main character was, mysterious. Alex was almost too normal for him ... or something.

Lovely story, the ending fit perfectly. I might have not liked it if they frolicked off together into happy land, haha.

Only Alex would promise love while killing someone. Like I said, it makes sense when we begin to understand him more.

Thanks. =)

Wow. Uhahguh... I don't know. This is brilliant. Absolutely wonderfully brilliant. L. O. V. E. I love this. But then again, it's so different. One moment there's a twisting in my gut that tells me this is a wee bit crazy, the next there's a pain in my chest telling me that this is the cutest thing ever. Hm. Oh well.

wow... i was totally not expecting that.
... but it was still a really good story.

OMG, A MORBID DENOUEMONT?? No!

That BITCH Maria! She should go DIE! Uh, well, she did...STUPID WHORE THAT SHE IS! GAH!

I can't find words to describe how beautiful you made this chapter. It was fuckign awesome. Even better than last chapter.

The emotive way you described nature...the role-reversal of Shain and Alex's characters...YOU ARE SO ACE!

Eh, there are so many things I could say in praise of your brilliance, but then I'd become a fanboy, non? AND WE DON'T WANT ANY OF THAT!

And just to ruin the mood; the last line was a TEENSEY bit cliched (love murder, murder love) but still powerfully delivered. I'm becoming a WHORE for your writing, and I would SO go read some more RIGHT NOW, if it wasn't half 11 at night and I didn't need to try and learn something to pass this English exam on wednesday. IRRELEVANT! *Praises Awesomeness*. I'LL READ MORE SON!

...ah oh ee, wow. Fuck yes.

BEST CHAPTER YET! I'm gonna keep this brief because the best points are made that way.

The events...wonderfully portrayed.
The characters...incredibly developed, and their vulnerability shows.
The DESCRIPTIONS...beyond words. "The concrete sillhouette of a girl standing beneath a tree caught my attention."...

"And him standing there with red shot eyes, so tender, pale, just like Autumn." IT'S PATHETIC FALLACY!! IT IS.

Too good to be true.

*Makes disdainful noise* Ok, so you were right, he does have a SLIGHTLY sweet side. Ugh, I hate being wrong. I guess I shouldn't try and know more about a story than the person who's written it O_O.

GAH! Well, this chapter was god in terms of character exposition (ugh, Maria, NEEDY BITCH!) but it felt like a filler chapter. BUT WE ALL HAVE THOSE. And, OO, it ALMOST bordered on sappy! FROM YOU! I was astounded...

FUCK! Timing issue; I'll review and read the other three chapters tonight, I promise.

This chapter was mostly dialogue and all the stronger for it. I really got a little confused though. First Alex seems cold and quite a bitch (in the first 3 chapters) and then he almost has a sensitive side?? What's up with that?

And ugh, the sex scene sounded brutal. HOW CAN HE DO THAT TO SOMEONE!? Ah! It was so fierce, I winced on Shain's behalf.

I do adore the way you describe setting and characters though, I really do: "The sound of his breath deafend me for all other sounds; just our heartbeats and breath was all we could hear. No sound of the ever-leaking sink in the bathroom or the rain outside.".

You somehow manage to make even the little things seem significant. Grr. You are far too good.

Righty, well, sadly I've got to fuck off to chemistry now, so I'll make sure I review all your chapters when I get home! Have a lovely day dear.

Gah! This is ridiculously gripping! I like how the chapters are really really short (easier for me to review) and always so poignant. I absolutely adore them.

It's quite clear that, uh, Alex has issues. Why's he so emotionally detatched? He's kind of got a rapist vibe to him...

I like how you don't utilise the name of the protagonist much. It kind of emphasises the lack of importance of them (I am a name-whore, so I do the opposite) and gives it an even MORE secluded feel to it [the piece].

If I wasn't in such a hurry, I'd write more, but I want to get as many reviews done now as I can. Gah!

I love how the protagonist is a bit of an anti-hero. You write really well from his POV.

Oh, I thought that the description of the setting was absolutely beautiful: "A soft, but strong, autumn wind blew in from the open window, making her shiver. The curtain flew into the room and then back to it's place, as if this was some kind of horror movie.". Yeah, wow.

And, my favourite line so far? "she said, half-laughing with her charming whiskey voice.". It rreally raises questions.

Now, I dunno if I've said before how outstanding your writing is? Gosh, I wish I could write half as well. Oh, and are the title itself and the titles of the chapters all references to self-harm?

I'm going to serenade you with...how many? 7 reviews! A review for each chapter. I hope you understand that these will be shitty reviews with very little constructive criticism in them?

OK! Well, it certainly has a FAST PACE. Good Lord! One moment I was reading about a staring competition, the next there are...naughty things happening in the toilets! I WAS TOTALLY UNPREPARED! But yeah! *Plot spoiler to any weirdos who read the reviews before reading the writing*. That was pretty awesome.

No complaints! And onto the next chapter.

this story rocks

WOAH.

Intense much?

Do we get names, by the way, or is it just guys one and two?

Hm... guess I better keep reading, huh?