i love that last line... awesome job

that was beautiful. i think that this is one of your more...evolved pieces. i rarely read poetry that really inspires me to write, but this one was just so beautiful. I love the matephors and symbolism,it gives the poem character, and i think you should experiment with poems youve already written and you might notice that they can be improved. thanks for sharing.

I love the feelings this evokes, the way the rhymes flow so smoothly...this is a truly beautiful poem.