Holy cow you had me going in the begining it seemed like this kid was tortured or being murdered or something along that line great descriptions in the begining and great imagery and then you add the funny twist on the end great job ^_^

t.j.

O. Kinda funny.Kinda.

Hehe... I laughed at the end of that... great job! I love this!

This is spellbinding, and I found this as I was considering a joking summary of a post as "shut up".

The wildest part of this was that, it seemed as if the end would've been: 'he was killed but he was quiet'.

That is so twisted! O my god- the descriptions in the beginning were amazing and brought to mind a torture chamber or something, but they completely made sense at the end too. Wow, such a twisted deep story in a little over 500 words. So cool.

okay that was odd at first I thought they were murdering him that was good it scared me at first.

Very intresting. I didn't except that to be the reason for crying. I think it was good.