I loved the last line, very well expressed

Amazing. Very nice poem. Like the imagery. Alot of the time, rhyme gets lost because it sounds forced. But the way you wrote it, it's great. Nice job!

Wow, beautiful, amazing poem! Perfect to the very last word. :)

so true, so true. you know, i've never read a rhyming poem that worked this beautifully.

Beautifully written and so true. I love how natural these rhymes are. I also loved the term 'metallic words'. Great imagery.

Keep up the great work :).

You have wonderful diction.

There's a soft bitterness in this that just rises as the poem goes on. I really enjoyed this; great job.

I liked this, it reminded me of a book I'm reading (Glamorama, Bret Easton Ellis) that's about that sort of lifestyle and the crowded emptiness of it all. I think your piece here captured that feeling fairly well, good work.

You need to stop being better than me! The last line is my favourite!