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| Prisoner of my soul 2006-05-16 ch 1,   | I like this poem. It doesn't seem like English is your second language at all! I can relate to what you're saying here. Good job! ;) |
| Luma 2006-04-21 ch 1, | Lovely, lovely. A masterpiece, truly. I really liked "My world is falling apart Too fast for me to bend down Pick up the pieces And make it right again." And the stanzas in italics, and also "My world is falling apart And it seemsas if someone Hit the fast forward button" Amazingly done. --Luma |
| QueenVixta 2006-02-12 ch 1, | This is really good, I can relate to a lot of it. Really well written, well done. It could see this being a song. Great work. QV x |
| zooz 2005-11-23 ch 1, | mishmish...ok first of all i'm sorry i think i misunderstood ur previous poem."it ends".hehe..looking it over..i realised you were actually addressing ur thoughts towards a friend..i was thinking more along the lines of an x-boyfriend turned friend situation..its your fault!! ur writing always inclines me to think of someone who broke your heart and by that i mean a guy..hehe..forgive me..but i guess the review could apply to the other poem..the one about the guy i was gona butcher.. As for this one..i love it..i love how it goes from being kinda subtle and gradually becomes more extreme and powerful..its funny that even when i read it i begin to read louder,faster and with more feeling anticipating the end where i slow down n start to think back kinda thing..m i making any sense? i love it..as usual..an amazing piece..and a longass review..lol love ya! |
| manooma 2005-11-22 ch 1, | this's so touching .. i mean wow ! be4 reading this .. i was in a bad mood .. after reading it .. i feel much better =)good job .. keep it up hun. n again .. thnk u 4 such poems .. thank you .. |
| Cool-Ruzz 2005-11-21 ch 1, | This was absolutely beautiful. I loved this. I loved this paragraph: 'I need a hug forever Someone there? anyone? Please, I need a shoulder to cry on I want to feel safe. I want to feel loved.' Beautiful! It was Bella! And ps - thnx for reviewing my poem, 'Unrequited Love'. I didn't take it at all as an insult. In fact, I appreaciated that you took the time to point out the gramatical and spelling errors. Thanks again! |
| Sinner By Nature 2005-11-16 ch 1, | (My world is falling apart Too fast for me to bend down Pick up the pieces And make it right again.) that's my fav parts hun..wonderful poem..really..and yes, it's just a phase..i hope so =) i'd hug ya 4ever, but im such a bad hugger and ur not depressing. ur undepressing! =D i luv ya gurl, instant fav! |
| Sunami Silverblade 2005-11-14 ch 1, | Ah! What a sad piece. :( Lovely, though--I can definitely see improvement, here, and I agree that this is one of your best works! The despair in this poem... and the metaphors, the similes, the imagery... it's painful to watch. As a reader, one feels like the "bystander" you mentioned--unable to help... or just too damn scared. Great job, Meme. This was amazing. |
| Paizley 2005-11-14 ch 1, | VEry nice. I can relate to that feeling, in fact this reminds me of a poem I wrote. Again, very nice. |
| loudly-unheard 2005-11-14 ch 1, | *hug* ... i liked the part about the fast forward thing |
| Remnants 2005-11-13 ch 1, | yes automatic fav. this was a great poem. had alot of heart in this one. i loved it. XOXOXO i really heard this one! AWSOME AWSOME AWSOME! |