 simpletonsgrin 2005-11-13 . chapter 1It seemed like there was a line missing between "where all the monsters" & "and creeos."
The last line was a bit to hoaky for me, but for the most part this was not bad.
I wish you luck, and hope that your time at FP.com will be productive and enjoyable.
-simpleton
PS (I've never known the sun to come up so early, but maybe you live somwhere where it does.) |