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| no.peace.los.angeles 2006-10-09 ch 1,   | "copper lemon yellow leaves fall from the soft boiled bone of every tree." - that is one of the most beautiful and perfect descriptions I have ever seen. This whole poem, the longing to feel comfort and safety when moving to a new situation, and comparing that feeling to moving into winter, is just the right metaphor. I love this poem. It is beautiful. I am adding this to my favorites. Keep writing! :) |
| Margot Tenenbaum 2006-03-20 ch 1, | this is beautiful.stunning. |
| the naked civil servant 2006-02-20 ch 1, | ok. i'm sorry. i am just in awe. what the ** was that? i can't even resort to my usual ploy of quoting lines back at you because i can't coherantly pay homage to such mastery because it's ALL SO ** GOOD. all of it. do you hear? you are GOD. |
| citrus scented 2005-12-13 ch 1, | wow. im left stunned again, this bundles up the season and paints ito ut so well, so cold and bitter. "like all those wispy strands of secrets and whispers that choke the boy I want for christmas." ...love that line. love this. |
| Pheobe Meryll 2005-12-11 ch 1, | IT'S all such a mess...(grammar police!)...anyway, I like the fernzied feel of this poem, you seem comfortable with free verse and your descriptives are brilliant - "copper lemon yellow leaves fall from the soft boiled bone of every tree." so unique! |
| LauraKM 2005-12-02 ch 1, | This is brilliant, had me hooked from the first word. love " i feel the energy palpitate against my nose...". |
| simpleplan13 2005-11-20 ch 1, | I like this.. well done... that last line is especially amazing |
| SomewhereShortOfAnIdiot 2005-11-14 ch 1, | an interesting readthe style is very unique and your use of language is clever and thought provoking good work |