I'm actually jealous of this one.

What a cool way to write! The poem as a literal representation of the subject. I think I'll have to try that sometime :-P. Beautiful, love.

Interesting, I really liked this. :)

I love that first line! I don't know what it is about it, but the 'rhyming in white' part just really caught me. Great job! Keep writing! :)

I really like that word, contritely. It sounds so... i don't know... like a british guy embracing you or something... I know, I have a weird imagination. Thank you for your review, It made me feel really happy, since I was having real trouble with those first 2 lines. Keep writing!

Wow, I love the imagery. I absolutely adore poems that I want to read over and over again cause the words taste so good. I just wanted to thank you for telling me how to get spaces between my stanzas, but I think I may have found a new favourite poet. Keep writing.

lovely. cryptic - different interpretations for every reader. nice job.

"tell the sun we'll rid ourselves of our naked skin."-I love that line; the sun is such a powerful "thing" as well as a metaphore. It really brings an empowering picture to ones mind when thinking of defying it.

Juliet.