I like this a lot, the descriptions are sparse but vivid and purposeful when they are there. You have a very interesting style, and I truly enjoyed this. It's really hard to find good femmeslash out there, but this is excellent. I like the way you developed the characters' personalities without having to spell them right out. Keep writing!

hehehehe. First off, there isn't much to the story considering it's pretty much a list. The description is lacking (I'm in love with description by the way... I wonder why I don't like Stephan King...) and well, it's lacking here. But the end if very nice. ^__^

Hey nice story/short. The first line could be more amazingful but I like the background and tutoring setting. + Those girls sound so delicate, except Phoenix who sounds grungy. Nice work.

You're a good slash writer, I have now determined. Not very many people are good at (femme)slash but you are. You deserve a medal--and here it is! *Presents medal* Take that and show it off!I enjoyed your story. It was short, sweet, and to the point but yet it still wasn't dumb or extremely cliched. It was pleasant and it was realistic, especially when talking about how first kisses are always awkward. Great job!