YES! Hahahahhaa. I loved it. Short, but that's fine, can't complain if it's short. I liked the dialogue and the flow of it was good. I liked the choice of adjectives.

Only thing is, it seemed maybe there was too much dialogue compared to the actual body of the story. ^_^

haha nice one!

Now I read this and your girl*girl one and I like both. This one has a great first line. Nicholas sounds hot. The entire thing is so short though. I assume(it might be in the summary I dunno but I'm infamous for asking stupid questions and somehow not noticing anything.) Anyway, those boys were like total opposites of the girls. They were all lust and groping. And speaking of groping, I have some nice Slashy stories if you're interested.

That was so ironic. I loved it! Great job. It was casual and sexy and when it comes to slash, that is the best. Being over the top is completely overrated and you avoided that. Your story made me want chocolate, too. :-)