creepy, in a make-your-flesh-crawl way. wondrous descriptions, excellent everything. i honestly cannot say more, i haven't the words. unfortuately i'm called away, though i'd rather sit and read the rest of this story. i'll find it again though. i have to.

yours, etc.

I love this chapter. Your use of diction when describing the point of view of Cyrus so vividly put the reader in his place. It comes even more alive when people can related to Cyrus' situation. I think it's that way with all of your chapters. Everyone relates with one of the three characters somehow, but Cyrus's really speaks to me. I can't wait until the three characters converge. I'm aching to see this progress. Keep writing! =]

Yay for an update. Poor Denise.

But, then again, some people just don't talk about when other people hurt them. Sad but true.

And it is kind of sad that it's not as memorable as the other two at that.

ho, powerful stuff. still waiting for the part were it all makes sense tho

Well, the dead girl decided homework was a waste of her time. (Which isn't surprising.) You had a random t somewhere in here as well as "two feet all" ...I stared at it for a bit 'cause I'm not sure what you meant. I blame school. I'm guessing two feet tall. Egh.

Not to be a hypocrite, I just figured you'd be a doll and fix my confusion on that 'un.

Anyways, the beating was quite interestingly done. Breaking a hanger doesn't seem like a very easy task to do on someone seeing as they have to move back and forth in opposite directions to break, and the crapheads sting, too...and cut. *rubs wrist* I accidently got cut by a wire earilier. It freakin' hurt.

Well, that's all my insight.

Hm. That was, indeed, quite delightful. I"m supposed to be doing physics, though. I'll come back and give you a better review later.

Argh! You're awesome writing once again amazes me! One thing, though, I'm still a bit confused in regards to the flow of the different chapters...I gather that each chapter has a different character, because that's how it seems, but they don't connect or anything...*Ah* confused. By the way, you got incantation right, it's actually spelled that way! Anyway, rock on!

Blessed be!

WOw. this is a very powerful piece. I am really impressed. You did a magnificent job. this piece really speaks for itself and catches the attention of the reader. Well done. Um.. I did see one typo I think. You wrote incantation, isn't it suppose to be encantation. Well good job. Looking forward for more.

Nurse person? Woot. Well, I'ma waiting for the next chapter.

I forgot to mention that my Blade was about how you try to cover up your feelings to try to keep a relationship, and how your heart must die in order to cover your feelings. yeah, I've been in an emo-tastic mood for a while.

I this is pretty good, I'm interested. I certainly hope it starts getting exciting soon, i would like to see how you write action-y scenes, after all, i know how well you write OTHER scenes...ahem.though, I'm a little confused as to what the two chapers had to do with each other. I'm guessing that the character from the first one is the same one from the second.

Sweet! You updated, yea! Thanks for the c.c. on Emotionless, no one tells me anything! *tear*

'Neeway, I like this chapter, I'm assuming it will tie into the first eventually... I couldn't see anything wrong with this chapter except a missing quotation mark towards the end, but that's it! Beautifully written, Kalli seems so...real! That's the best way I can say it, sorry...oh well...

Blessed be, and update soon!

Woah. That. Was. AWESOME! I'm...I'm left completely speechless by the last few paragraphs, the whole thing is so descriptive and flowing and wow. I mean, it's sucks to be your character, but still, you narrated it so well! CerriC and Archipelago, you ROCK my SOCKS!

But I did notice a few things...such as the sentence "As old as Miss Ada was, she needed help with the daily upkeep of her home." This struck me as odd, because the tone of the sentence suggests that it was a surprise that she needed help, whereas I would consider it completely normal that an elderly person needed help around the house.

Also, the sentence "Even though I knew I had done the work and that she would not give me more than I deserved" is a fragment. Just a note.

WRITE MORE! I'm really looking forward to reading this more, the style's amazing!

Blessed be, and thanks for reviewing 'A State of Nonexistence'!

Rawr, that was so awesomely intense. Intense emotion just flowed from every word of that. Brilliant. I so wanna read more. Now. (cries) I hate delayed gratification.