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| Marioh 2006-01-18 ch 1,  | abuseI love this piece...the descriptions are so vivid and the words perfectly suiting. I laso like the structure as it makes the lines flow much better.. Love this piece, and am very impressed by it. |
| no.peace.los.angeles 2005-11-29 ch 1, | abuseWow, that is simply gorgeous. The first stanza is amazing. The arch of the farcical moon is a coyly raised eyebrow...wonderful. I am impressed. I love the ending, too. Such a sensual, sexy piece. Bravo! |
| Osunale 2005-11-24 ch 1, | abuseThis is a wonderful piece! Quite evocative. |
| Starlight Maiden 2005-11-19 ch 1, | abuseI adore this...'They say she is good with her hands, better with her tongue, but best with her mind.'Absolutely wonderful. I like how everything you say in this poem is said in a way that you'd never think to use...~Beckie |
| Exquisitely 2005-11-19 ch 1, | abuseWonderful, as always. |
| Salieri 2005-11-18 ch 1, | abuseYour writing is achingly lovely, very minimalist. I especially like the vivid imagery in the first stanza. I'm flattered and humbled that you would like my poem enough to review it. Btw, how are you able to make the lines form separate stanzas? Whenever I download documents from Microsoft Word, all the stanzas disappear and everything is double spaced. |
| mizu no kokoro 2005-11-17 ch 1, | abusewow, i'm speechless~ some awesome vocabs too^^ good work keep writing! |
| Ohmm 2005-11-17 ch 1, | abusethis is gorgeous, really. with every line you paint indelible imagery that strikes a chord with the audience, especially the first three stanzas where everything is quite vague but the emotion, the message is carried through with a sensual sinuosity. great job! |
| Aquafied 2005-11-16 ch 1, | abusei think the last stanza and line are my favorite, then again i love the whole poem. so graceful and angry.like who everyone imagines to be the perfect failure. |
| Razukue 2005-11-16 ch 1, anon. | abuseinteresting poem. it is very open. |
| thornsxinxyourxside 2005-11-16 ch 1, | abuseThat was really good, I like how it was written, where the breaks were put, and I love your use of vocabulary ^^ Keep up the awesome work --Amanda |
| Niniel Uskglass 2005-11-16 ch 1, | abuseI like this, the way you talk of her on stilts, as well as her being "impenetrable". It can be taken both mentally and physically. Good word choice, especially with "farcical moon". Keep writing. |
| youzi 2005-11-16 ch 1, | abusei don't rate it because i refuse to underestimate the maturity of young people nowadays (I'm not an adult either) and besides, this piece does not have to be read/interpreted sexually. It's really more about the strength of a woman... |
| Tigger 2005-11-16 ch 1, anon. | abusefix the rating to m, if category I -- but it's really not understandable to anyone but an adult. |
| truth is subjective 2005-11-16 ch 1, | abusedescriptive, and quite a few of your poems place a strong, and good emphasis on the last line. write more senior! ^^ |