another one well done! i felt the impact too. very emphatic-the lady Elaine

Very good. I just reread your bio and noticed something: you're only fourteen? Really? You write much older.

"(breath, heartbeat, sensation!)" - I think that stinted the poems flow. it was just so pretty, really well written and utterly poetic.

* noelle

I love it, except for the fifth line- it seems too casual for the poem, not "poetic" enough. But even so, this is well worth the read. Great job.

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O...it's so short of a read, but it doesn't seem that way. Ahh...short, sweet, 'n to the point. I like how you bolded and spaced the words; it adds to the effect. In general, it's a very lovely ickle poem, I could feel it.

yays.. i love those moments.. lovely.