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| sarah1491 2006-09-23 ch 1,  | abuseYour lline breaks seem a little strange, for instance: "It is still/Late autumn" should probably be one. I understand you wanted to make your poem longer, but I don't think this is the way to do it. (Don't get me wrong, I really like the poem ^^;; the line breaks are just ... different?)Good luck & keep writing! |
| Felicia Danielle 2006-09-01 ch 1, | abuseI suppose I can relate to this on some degress. You did a phenominal job. I love your description, "Tempermental". Guess I knew a guy like that myself once. Well bravo. ^_^ Do keep up the wonderous work |
| a lonely september 2006-08-24 ch 1, | abusethis kind of thing is so sad. : ( a relationship that just isnt what you need. . . this was so well written tho... i like it, even tho it makes me sad... |
| Piffle 2006-05-31 ch 1, anon. | abuseHave I reviewed this one? Well, nice. The lines could have been a little longer, got a bit ambiguous at the 'she declines/his woolen scarf and gloves/irritate her cold, clammy skin', as in, did she decline the scarf or the ice cream... the ice cream was a bit humorous in such a sad poem. lol. Well, great job. :D - Piffle |
| butterfly-touch 2006-01-10 ch 1, | abusewow. this poem is really beautiful. short but emotional and passionate. Nice. |
| Cool-Ruzz 2005-12-29 ch 1, | abuseWow, this is so incredibly beautiful. And romantic but sad. Wonderfully written, good work here! Keep writing! Love, Ruzz p.s. ~ I had updated my story |
| southern-star 2005-12-14 ch 1, | abusewow i luv how yr lines r so short it holds the feeling on until you read the next line. cool. keep on writing. *southern-star* |
| HauntedMisery 2005-11-28 ch 1, | abuseWow, this is so beautiful, excellent work! |
| ali 2005-11-21 ch 1, anon. | abuseI luv ur storys! there soo good. keep it up k sis! |
| allyburner 2005-11-19 ch 1, anon. | abuseHm... HOW MANY TIMES DO I HAVE TO TELL YOU TO WRITE SOMETHING DIFFERENT? Ha ha. Jkz. What I meant was, this is wonderful. It's really good. I'm getting tired of saying the same thing, cos really, I have nothing else to say. It's brilliant. Stroke of genius. It's just that... this kind of genre's really starting to ** me off... Hope ur not offended. Personal preference, you know. =D -Ally B. |
| Sally-andersonn 2005-11-18 ch 1, | abuseI like the ending. Gosh, the main character seems to be a whiner. |
| cutie1789 2005-11-18 ch 1, anon. | abusevery wierd. its nice, but wierd. i like it! by the way, was this a poem or a chapter? It kinda confused me. |
| xiaobudian 2005-11-17 ch 1, | abusebleeding sycamores. V. poetic ^^Ah! I keep forgetting to call u the great poetess! *thunks self on head* |
| mizu no kokoro 2005-11-17 ch 1, | abuseit breaks my heart... very sad yet meaningful poem~ keep writing! |
| Faithless Juliet 2005-11-17 ch 1, | abusePowerful and passionate; I loved the intensity of honesty of this piece. Keep up the good work. Much love,Juliet. |