Wow, see, I think this is the best one of your I've read thus far. I really like the tone you express in your writing, it's very...uniuqe.

a curly haired girl in ribbons...that reminds me of victorian fashion...and that line "it's not too late to be beautiful"...really inspiring...very good job...oh and pls, review some of my poems if you have the time...

truly yours...

"with roses cut into her eyes"

beautiful imagery.

"and oh,/

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don't you love the irony?/"

perfectperfection.

Very nice, and I find myself wanting more. Brava.

I love how it sort of... starts off normal, and then degenerates into wildness. It's beautiful.

"with roses cut into her eyes" that was one of my favorite lines. this was so pretty&pure awesome. : )

Great piece !

This is incredible...The format was perfect, and the concept was beautifully captured and expressed...It's excellent.

shiver inducing, creepy and the way you write it makes this so sexy. loved it, from the begining to bitter ending. love it.

* noelle

wow... it creeps me out to think aobut it... you did a great job

keep writing!

the format in this is confused, but i think you just about manage to pull it off.