update more! You got some good stories..maybe you should nust focus on one at a time? Update! No complaining!

OOH! New character! This Dryal guy seems interesting. I'm sorry for not reviewing the other chapters. I haven't checked my review history in a while.

Please update soon!

Yram Hael

Action! Excitement! Adventure! And even... maybe... romance?

*ahem* Yeah. Don't even ask.

W.O.F.P.A.G.M.

=)Umber

Durn durn DURN...

I know I've said it before, so I'll abbreviate. W.O.F.P.A.G.M.

If you can't work it out, 'mail me.

*applause*

Just, those few lil' punctuation mistakes to iron out. This is a really good story.

Excellent.

Once, I think, you forgot to change Tanya into Kailin. Ah, well. Nobody else ssems to have noticed. Probably cos your writing flows well.

And just, once again, a couple of minor punctuation/grammar mistakes.

Sorry it took me so long to get here... *sigh* my stupid computer broke down!

Anyways, this is the first of many reviews to come! So prepare yourself for an onslaught. (Did I spell that right? Probably not.)

Oh, right... *assumes serious face* this is a serious website...

Whatever. You'll still get my strange reviews.

Yeah. So, great chappie, as I've said before. Nice name-changes. Impressive. Just watch out for punctuation - capitalising and that.

au revoir,L. Flames

I am going to read it tonight and so will my mum we will write a review together !!

A few grammatical mistakes here and there but besides that, good! I like the characters and the plot is getting somewhere. Just... I was actually surprised to see this in the T rating. Maybe you should put it in M, especially due to chapter 2. That was scary.

Anyway, 'till next time!

Yram Hael

Nice. You have a really cool writing style, giving a real sense of personality with your characters somehow. Check out my site for some visual inspiration and good luck with you future works. :)