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| The River Sings 2006-05-28 ch 1,  | abuseLovely lovely lovely. Very beautiful and smooth! Wonderful imagery! you have real talent! |
| Matthew James Current 2006-05-08 ch 1, | abuseWow you are very talented. Lovely work here. You should write more piece like this. I say the experiment was a success. |
| LordK 2006-01-29 ch 1, | abuseBeautiful, again. These images are so great, and so easy to follow. Lovely, lovely poetry. The third stanza especially is wonderful. In the way I read it, the stress was on "a" rather than "new" in "The world, all anew", but I'm being nitpicky because I'd like to offer you some kind of criticism, out of gratitude. And once again, it probably still fits perfectly. Great poem, again. |
| Teigra Michaels 2006-01-05 ch 1, | abuseBecause I have been wake and watched the sun rise, I can visualise exactly what it is you are saying. Your poem has let me relive that memory, thank you. |
| Joelle Duran 2006-01-03 ch 1, | abuseThis is fantastic! Lovely rhyme and meter in this, not to mention the imagery. I especially loved the'The world, all anew//Greets me with a virginal shiver' I'm not good at critting poetry, but it seems like 'O'er the flowers he lingers' will fit better with the other second lines if you chose to strike the 'the.' Regardless, just beautiful! |
| Kat-Renee Kittel 2005-12-05 ch 1, | abuseI love the gently strong imagery of this, especially "beneath the moist dew the world, all anew," and "O'er the flowers he lingers with fondling fingers. It's like a sweet love story that brings my heart hope enough to welcome the day. Have you read my Rainy Day Memory poem? It reminds me of the imagery of this one, save mine is shorter. I liked your hobbies--"stalking opera singers (okay maybe not)." That gave me a good laugh. I like Bernstien, too. I have his Chichester Psalms. A friend of mine sang the Psalms in the local symphony performance (Wichita, Ks). Would you happen to live in New York, perchance? -Katie. |
| rrmehta364 2005-11-24 ch 1, | abuseawesome poem. however, i admit, i dont know enough about poetry to say much more than awesome. so, i will take this opportunity to say awesome. |
| SliversofSilverPain 2005-11-22 ch 1, | abusethis is amazing; as is all of your stuff. i am insanely jealous. well written indeed. love the imagery |
| Daylily 2005-11-19 ch 1, | abuseThis is full of powerful imagery. I love the first quatrain. Glorious. |
| QueenVixta 2005-11-19 ch 1, | abuseThis is really good. Very beautiful and the ending is lovely. Great work. QueenVixta |
| the-game-of-life 2005-11-18 ch 1, | abuseoh my gosh, that was really goodi dont really read this kind of stuff but it was good |
| Mikki Amboree 2005-11-18 ch 1, | abuse*jaw drops* That was incredible! Wow, I just adore the imagery! You're so good! ^__^ |
| cbeyerle 2005-11-18 ch 1, | abuseI'm sorry. Something about this poem made me feel a little strange...don't get me wrong - this is a fairly good poem - it definately rises above a lot of what I see on Fiction Press...but it gave me a very odd feeling of...something.Keep it up. I love it. |