I think this is absolutely amazing. I know you wrote this ages ago, but I'd love if you continued it.

Oh... my... God... *cries a ocean* thats so sad, it reminds me alot of an RP me and my friend do, and that makes it sadder
This is really good piece of work, filled with emotion and undertsnading, good job, write more!

one word:

Sniff

**omg this was sad *tear* but its realli good. Hope you continue it ;)