This was well-written and quite touching. I like it a lot. Is there no more?

Unfortunately, even if i hadn't been referred to this by your lj, I would have known that this was therapy disguised as fiction. While you write well, you only write for you. This type of writing style is becoming increasingly popular, particularly in music. That doesn't make it good. You could have written your experience far more emotively, in such a way that it would have appealed to people other than you. The events are too specific.

I would have liked this far more if you'd had focused on the layers of love, unease and betrayal. Again, I can see so much talent in this that is wasted on being introspective. The fact that it merely fills in details you'd already posted in journal also makes it seem exhibitionist. I will admit that that would not have been my opinion if I hadn't found it in that context.

I find it impossible to sympathise with such a weakly written character. If she hadn't been you (that is, you protecting yourself) maybe you could have given her depth. Nobody is that weak. You don't write like this normally.