. . . one of my friends from work, Rick, has AIDS, he almost died last summer from what should have been a small case of phenomena. He spent almost five months in the hospital, most of them sedated. AIDS is a horrid creation of mankind and no one should be punished for that. But luckily Rick has friends, I one of them.

But, as for the poem,. . . I like it. Sadly it's all too true. You should rework it a little. The message is great, don't change that at all, but try for one of the following:RhymeRepetitionRhythmWith out at least or all, it’s just no a poem. Although there are exceptions, but this one should have those.