This poem is a good representation of the delicacy of young love. I like the format you've used here and the thoughts you've chosen to communicate. Your word choice is very good for the subject too. The last stanza is strange and a little awkward because it doesn't rhyme with the one above. Also the word "slaves" doesn't fit with the other beautiful words, because it has very negative connotations and the rest of the words represent sweet sorrow, like "tear" and "apart". So i would rework the last stanza. In the third line, I think you wanted to say "meant" instead of "ment." Good job.

sigh. thtas whi i dont date. to get my heart broken when my emotions are so fragile... un-uh!

Nice poem, you know.

Good poem.

Love sucks... but this poem doesn't!

Oh Gods, I swear this is my new "Crush" poem. I've been obsessing (it seems like) over this boy, and my friends keep wanting me to see him, just to make me happy. I think though, if I am to see/hear from him, I'll die of shock. Or heart attack. O.o Is this what love is?

Harlequin~Please fix me...

OH, so sad and beautiful...I like it.