i just keep thinking odd little things like, isnt it Jesus H. Christ and isnt the sun a star...

but yeah, it was good, quick though.

seems like this is going to be a really good story.

hm, i supposed she can still get away now, cant she?

everything seems so small and slow, i love it.

i wish they're were more stories that could move at this pace, much more realisitic

good, emotion seems to be really stirring intruiging

nice suffering reminds me of a story i once co-wrote, but it a much softer way..without the starving.

interesting, it is a cliche idea but hey, its well done, very well done.

though i am not sure they would have had them jump straight out, but the panic is well stated.