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riotmaker 2006-10-19 . chapter 1
so gorgeous and painful. makes my heart ache. i love the middle of the first stanza. and the middle stanza too. and mostly all of it.

you write with amazing eloquence and beauty.

xoxo
A. J. Krautwurst 2006-10-13 . chapter 1
this makes me want to collaborate with another writer sometime, it's something i've never done. i can't say i'm a really big fan of playing with punctuation, and i personally found it a little distracting, but the images in this are perfectly ghoulish. a good poem to have written on halloween.
marshbar960 2006-07-31 . chapter 1
very vivid. love the title. thx for sharing.
Kavita Najim 2006-07-21 . chapter 1
frighteningly beautiful
the naked civil servant 2006-06-07 . chapter 1
you can't expect worthiness to follow those killer cataclysmically shockingly excellent first lines, but you manage. every word perfect.
lookingwest 2006-04-24 . chapter 1
a very awkward format, but i believe that you make it work...
fwaahh 2006-03-03 . chapter 1
your words are beautiful yet sting like a razor.
Rachel Peterson 2006-02-02 . chapter 1
Reading this was like eating ice in the snow.

Amazing.
crazy dog events 2006-01-16 . chapter 1
I can dig. Loved the bit in the first stanza, '... tease of a swan'

On the whole, a nice piece.
citrus scented 2006-01-12 . chapter 1
wow this is such a wicked idea. really sinister idea, the dream...it almost creeps my out. just ownderful poem though
Aslan Israel 2005-12-30 . chapter 1
Wow... so much there it's almost hard to take it all in. Beautiful job, both of you.
not sure yet 2005-12-30 . chapter 1
o, so prettyful, i absolutely adore the second part, adore it, and the ending was presented in such a way i found to be dragging, pulling at my stomach just enough to force me move closer to the screen but not to actually rip it out, nostalgic (sp?!?1) in a subdued sort of way, muchly love this, excellent job
Kusje 2005-12-27 . chapter 1
once again, this is truely great work.i like it because i can compare my problems w/this.good job.
Chi Ame 2005-12-25 . chapter 1
Interesting... I love your manipulation of type to stress certain points, it really adds to the poem. "my halloween-eyes girl bleeds a keliodoscope kamikaze from her tongue" was my favorite line. I've never heard anything like it.
KonekOniko 2005-12-24 . chapter 1
Wow, I've been dead for a while, ne? Ah well, beautiful poem(s) even if they are dark. Still, dark poetry can be oh-so-lovely...
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