Poignant. Brilliant. Overall, good stuff.

Thank you for the experience,

Push

Beautifully written work. It is sad. Great job! Good luck with poetry and life. Have an excellent day.

Twilight Starr

Oh wow.

That one's a beautiful one. Or rather, prettyful. Veery prettyful.

The last line packs a subtle punch. I love it.

I think I should try this form of poetry. I can write cinquians and sonnets and so on, but never haiku. Pah.

But really. I love this. Going on faves for...well, you know why it is. )

*Bambam*

Wow... I like this, very much...well done, congratulations, u have been added to another favorites list!

Eek.

Such powerful words.

Especially the last line.

Beautiful!

PS - Evil blob!

I agree. Evil blob.

Hello! I seem to remember getting an alert for this, but don't appear to have read it. Hmm.

Curiouser and curiouser...

Beautiful poem. I see it in my head when I read it. Bear with me.

I see ... like you know when it's raining, and you look up? And you can see all the droplets falling towards you? I see that. Then on the next line, the 'camera' (Oh no, I've started. I'll never stop now.) moved back and changed angle so you can see a girl standing in like gloomy darkness on a neverending plain, looking up and crying.

Beautifulness.

Love the ending.

Gorgeous poem. So emotional. I love it.

Oh, btw, I hate barney too.

*Wanders off mumbling about conspiracies involving purple dinosaurs that sing irritating songs*

Toodles! -

OMG THAT IS SO BEAUTIFUL T-T

wonderful wonderful

so very touching *cries*

Awesome poem. I think you caputered so many emotions in such a little length of time. Good job!

Way to stick with the tradition of nature-themed haikus and sijos while including angst! I should try this format, because that last line is subtly strong. Good job. Chyme