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| Morwain 2006-04-26 ch 1,  | abusethis was good but it rhymed(i'm sorry i have a problem with poems that rhyme they bug me a bit) but still it was good |
| aslimegreenasalemon 2006-02-15 ch 1, | abuseI really enjoyed this one. thanks for the reveiw! I like this one because I know how this person was feeling- |
| Shade 2006-01-06 ch 1, | abuseThat was a really god poem, I always love ryhme poems that flow very well. Good job. And about my 'Gem' poem, the girl's boyfriend (whom she was leaving regretfully) was addicted to drugs. Not a true story, just came to my head. Kinda weird I know, anyhoo... Great job again! I read the rest of your poems later buh bye! ~Shade |
| Aslan Israel 2006-01-02 ch 1, | abuseI like this, simple rhymes say a lot. Nice. |
| The Blazing Eclipse 2005-12-21 ch 1, | abusehuh...well, i'm glad you made it work, you were havin' trouble with it...kinda weird how it changes so dramitically from being sad to walking with high-heels though...i thought that was what you were gonna fix...apparently not... |
| til-iburnout aka Amanda Hel... 2005-12-07 ch 1, | abuseVery good. I love it in fact. I need to clear a space in my favorites for this one. |
| Shadowhound 2005-12-04 ch 1, | abusevery nice. i especially like the ending. if you don't mind, i'd like to print this off and show it to a friend. she doesn't have computer access right not, and i'll probaly forget later, so do i have your permission to print this off and show it to her? i don't intend to pass it off as my own if that is what you are thinking, i just want to try and cheer her up. |
| Ajna 2005-12-03 ch 1, | abuseBeautiful, beautiful poem! We just have to go on whenever things like this happen. I especially love the lines "She wasn't falling in love// She was falling apart." Nicely put! :) |
| i call it laughable 2005-11-28 ch 1, | abusei normally don't like direct rhyming poems but you made this one enjoyable. i like how she pulls herself together at the end. that's a nice relief. |
| renru-no-ren 2005-11-28 ch 1, | abuseintresting pattern |
| Sagaciouspnay 2005-11-27 ch 1, | abuseoh wow. VERY interesting. I'm glad she lifted those tears away but I'm sure she didn't have to "put on heels" and so forth. But then again, I must be thinking of a different image. hope u review my works sometime. thanx. |
| Changethesubject 2005-11-27 ch 1, | abusei can relate, well done! i liked the way you wrote it, especially the part about the pain of the mascara streaks, the first stanza and the last. ~pinkazalea |
| darkaura de shadow 2005-11-26 ch 1, | abusewow,i like the part where your discribing her ...i like her healing process! |
| happypills03 2005-11-25 ch 1, | abusewow! i love it.. i know the feeling.. |
| Sinera 2005-11-25 ch 1, | abuseA nice poem, though some meshed words were a little annoying. 'killeda' was frustrating for me. Not sure why to be honest, I know why you might do that, and I do it too sometiems... anyway, over all a nice poem, but watch your language. ;) |